My Comparative Essay

World’s (Not) Finest

By Wyatt Wolfman

Imagine that you are one of the most powerful people in America. You have been going against your morals, but you are riding the high life of power. Then, everything comes crashing down on you. People are exposing you for your wrongdoings, and you have two options: admitting you are wrong and living the rest of your life in shame, or trying to cover up what you did and attempt to stay in power. What would you do? There’s a catch. Both options have the same result: you get caught and become a disgraceful person. It all ends the same, but people will still attempt to heighten their reputation by doing whatever they possibly can to stay in power, even if it is wrong and against their morals. Throughout history, people will do anything to obtain more power. They do this by fear mongering, scapegoating and lying in an effort to preserve their power and reputation. In The Crucible, Reverend Parris is an extremely selfish man who puts his own reputation before everything and anyone else because of his greed, selfishness and his desire for power.

This works until John Proctor starts becoming vocal about his distrust for Parris. More and more people are beginning to catch on because of his recurring deceitful and selfish acts. Parris is fuming with this so called disrespect that had been brought upon him. “The salary is sixty-six pound, Mr. Proctor! I am not some preaching farmer with a book under my arm; I am a graduate of Harvard College… Mr. Corey, you will look far for a man of my kind at sixty pound a year! I am not used to this poverty; I left a thrifty business in the Barbados to serve the Lord. I do not fathom it, why am I persecuted here? I cannot offer one proposition but there be a howling riot of argument. I have often wondered if the Devil be in it somewhere; I cannot understand you people otherwise,” (The Crucible, p. 51, ). Parris is described by John Proctor as “a broken minister.” He is supposed to be a minister, but instead, he just wants gold. Parris is outraged when he and John Proctor have a dispute about his payment. He is an extremely entitled, hypocritical man, and he refuses to give up on his claim. He is dead set that he is being underpaid, even though it can be inferred by the following events that he wrong. Instead of admitting that he is wrong like an adult, he instead whines until Proctor walks away. He blatantly lies and goes back on a previous agreement to save his reputation. To an outsider hearing the story, it seems like he is standing up for himself while in reality, he is wailing until he gets his way. This proves that his reputation in his number one priority. He truly is a broken minister. Parris is also corrupt in the mind. As a minister and a Puritan, everything is supposed to be God first. It is faith that drives their society. Reverend Parris also kisses up to Judge Danforth 24/7. Whatever Danforth’s views are, Parris will pretend to agree. While doing this, he becomes trusted by Danforth. The whole colony see’s the affection Parris is receiving from Danforth, Parris becomes trusted as well. Parrus becomes unofficial right hand man of Judge Danforth. After multiple atrocious requests, such as gold candle sticks, Parris’ clout is becoming a major issue in the town afflicted by the false accusations of witchcraft. Reverend Parris’ reputation first attitude towards life is extremely comparable to Joseph McCarthy.

The McCarthy Era was a heinous act of scapegoating and false accusations by Joseph McCarthy in an effort to gain power and heighten his reputation. Joseph McCarthy enjoyed a short time of his highet of power and respect before he became a pathetic excuse and drank himself to death. Not only were his pitiful ways discovered, “When reporters asked to see the list, McCarthy said he left it in his other suit, which was still on the plane. In fact, McCarthy did not have any list. He was basing his claims on a letter that had been written more than three years ago,” (McCarthyism, p. 43) McCarthy’s power made him a major influence across the country. He was a power hungry man who only cared about himself and his reputation. McCarthy eventually pit neighbors against neighbors and friends against friends. He didn’t care about the grief he was causing as long as he stayed in power. This went too far, and McCarthy knew it. How would somebody so narcissistic and so greedy let go of that power and become the laughing stock of the country by admitting his wrongs? Joseph McCarthy certainly wouldn’t. There were two possible ways to get to the same outcome: becoming an ignominious piece of garbage. He chose riding the high life for as long as possible. After eight years, he drank himself to death from all the humiliation. It was a fitting end to this dismal mans life. McCarthy’s greed and narcissism was extremely harmful to many people. Just like Donald Trump today, his attitude is making countless people live in fear. Donald Trump is an egotistical maniac who is extremely similar to Joseph McCarthy and Reverend Parris because his ego and reputation are more important to him than anything else. Instead of admitting his wrong doings, he blatantly lies and moves on, often literally leaving millions of people in awe.

“[Donald Trump] Spent five years refusing to admit that President Obama was born in the U.S.—and still hasn’t apologized,” (https://www.hillaryclinton.com/feed/things-donald-trump-has-said-and-done-that-in-a-normal-election-would-disqualify-a-nominee/).

Donald Trump’s false, discriminatory comments led to five years of repeatedly making false claims that President Obama was not born in the United States of America. After Obama providing proof that he was born in America, Trump had two options: he could apologize and move on, or deny he ever made those false claims when there is video proof and multiple tweets that HE wrote stating that President Obama was not born in America. This proves what kind person Donald Trump is. Instead of being a good person and admitting his mistakes like a grown orange man, he put aside basic values and denied he said it all. This led to a hilarious press conference when President Obama took shots at Trump by playing The Lion King, jokingly playing along with Trump’s claims that he was born in Kenya, not America. Donald Trump doesn’t have basic values that almost everyone has. It goes past Republican and Democrat. He’s so bad that he has an approval rating under 40%, setting new records each day. In other words, he lost the approval of 10% of people that should approve of Trump. That’s more than three million people, which is more than people than Hillary Clinton won the popular vote by. Donald Trump is trying to use his reputation to take advantage of scared, hysterical people. The biggest difference about Trump is the time. This is 2017, and people have recourses to fact check Trump. There are reporters who ask him questions that he cannot answer because he is unfit to be president, but that is an argument for another time. The biggest difference about Trump is the time. This is 2017, and people have recourses to fact check Trump. There are also reporters who ask him questions that he cannot answer time and time again because he is unfit to be president. When people are hysterical, it is short lived these days. People are scared of terrorism so they scapegoat all Muslim’s, but there is always another side. When there is hysteria, people will always jump in to defend those being targeted by the hysterical. Hysteria cannot become as widespread as it once was able to, but it can still have a big effect. Donald Trump created hysteria with his campaign, and he was able to capitalize on what he created to win the election and become the president of the United States.

Reverend Parris, Joseph McCarthy, and Donald Trump all display this perfectly. They put aside their morals and they do things that they know are wrong just for their personal benefit. These types of selfish, narcissistic people take advantage of widespread hysteria to gather even more people behind them, greatly heightening their reputation in the process. During the Salem Witch Trials, Reverend Parris sided with Abigail Williams and the rest of Salem. Doing this, he got the entire town behind him and eventually became the unofficial right hand man of Judge Danforth. Joseph McCarthy took advantage of the hysteria surrounding communists and quickly rose from a nobody Senator to leading of multiple committees and becoming a major influential figure. Today, Donald Trump takes advantage of disempowered people everyday in an attempt to satisfy those who voted for him. People can fact check in the 21st century, and people definitely do. Donald Trump constantly makes false, discriminatory claims about everyone that is not exactly like him. History never fails to repeat itself. Throughout American history, people like Reverend Parris, Joseph McCarthy and Donald Trump keep popping up. This keeps happening, even in today’s world. Hysteria always brings out to worst of us, but in the Trump Era, it is not affecting all of us. More than 60% of America disapproves off him and they will not be fed his false, atrocious comments. It is impossible for everybody to believe when we have the internet and mobile phones. If someone hears something that seems off, as things Trump says often do, they can pull out their phone and find the answer in a matter of seconds. Lies do not spread like wild fire anymore, but hysteria does. Less and less people each day stop approving of Donald Trump, but he is the president. He was able to fear monger and capitalize on the scared people whose emotions he created to get himself in the top political position in the world. He is not just marginalizing a small group of people, he is marginalizing religions, countries and genders. That includes Muslims, Mexico, Iraq, Syria, Libya, Iran, Somalia, Sudan, Yemen, women, lesbians, gay people, bisexual people, transgender people, queer people and disabled people. That is an uncountable percent of the world population, and this outrage must be put to an end.

I really enjoyed writing this. I loved finding textual evidence and analyzing it. This essay is a good representation of my second trimester learning.

Humanities Book Talk

Name: Wyatt   2016

Humanities

What are the components of a thorough, concise BOOK TALK?

Directions: When creating a book talk, use this helpful template to organize your ideas. Simply fill in what you’d like to say in the space below for each section.

 

Grabber:

In Ender’s Game by Orson Scott Card, first published in 1985, you are faced with a desisve question:  Can a six year old save the world? Can a pointless game help him keep the world safe?

 

Plot Summary:

Ender is a third. Thirds are dreaded in this dystopic society, as any childern after the second are frowned upon. When government officials ask to take Ender away to military training in space, his parents are almost glad. They are conditioned to dislike thirds, and they don’t realize that Ender is more than just a third. On the shuttle ride up, Ender notices that he is treated differently. Even though he is just six, he is a genius. When you delve deeper into the book, you forget that Ender is just six. He journeys into space and is trained to become a better battlefield leader. He learns how to predict an opponent’s move, and is made to play a competitve game that teaches him how to succeed in battle. The scale of what is he is doing is unimaginable. What nobody realises is that Ender is about to be the most important person of all time. Will he be able to stop an alien force that is larger than the earth’s entire population?

 

Reading Strategy (with textual evidence)

Being a third, Ender is bullied by his brother and peers. He finally gets fed up after being harrased, and  he confronts his oppressor. He doe an unusual way, one that promptes the government to look into his ablities. On page “Then why did you do it?”

“He had his gang there,” Ender said.

“So, does this excuse anything?”

“No.”

“Tell me why you kept on kicking him. You had already won the fight.”

“Knocking him down one the first fight. I wanted to win the next ones, too. So they’d leave me alone.”

When Ender says this, he displays a knowledge of stategy. The biggest war of all time is about to begin, but to Ender, it is just a game. This shows that Ender is an exeptional person, both metally and physicly. The book is about the balance of game and reality from Ender’s perspective. It is about using games to prepare for reality, but also using games to mask reality.

 

Recommendation:

 

I strongly recommend this book to anyone who enjoyed the Hunger Games series. It is the same type of addictive writing that gets you hooked. The dystopic setting is extremely intriguing and keeps you thinking throughout the entire book.

 

This is my book talk. It has grammatical and spelling errors, but the way I presented it was more important to me, as none of my classmates will ever see this. I really enjoyed writing my book talk.

Humanities Essay Outline

Name:                                             Humanities

7th Grade                                                                         Comparative Essay

Outline for Crucible/McCarthy Comparative Essay

 

Theme:  Reputation

 

Paragraph #1: Introductory Paragraph (GIT)

 

Grabber Statement (G):

Imagine that you are one of the most powerful people in America. You have been going against your morals, but you are riding the high life of power. Then, everything comes crashing down on you. People are exposing you for your wrongdoings, and you have two options: admitting you are wrong and living the rest of your life in shame, or trying to cover up what you did and attempt to stay in power. What would you do?

 

Introduction of Theme (I):

There’s a catch. Both options have the same result: you get caught and become a disgraceful person. It all ends the same, but people will still attempt to heighten their reputation by doing whatever they possibly can to stay in power, even if it is wrong and against their morals.

 

Thesis Statement (T):

Throughout history, people will do anything to obtain more power. They do this by fear mongering, scapegoating and lying in an effort to preserve their power and reputation.

 

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Paragraph #2: Crucible Thematic Connection

 

Topic Sentence (T):

 

In The Crucible, Reverend Parris is an extremely selfish man who puts his own reputation before everything and anyone else because of his greed, selfishness and his desire for power.

 

Explanatory Sentence (E):

This works until John Proctor starts becoming vocal about his distrust for Parris. More and more people are beginning to catch on because of his recurring deceitful and selfish acts.

Evidence (E):

Parris is fuming with this so called disrespect that had been brought upon him. “The salary is sixty-six pound, Mr. Proctor! I am not some preaching farmer with a book under my arm; I am a graduate of Harvard College… Mr. Corey, you will look far for a man of my kind at sixty pound a year! I am not used to this poverty; I left a thrifty business in the Barbados to serve the Lord. I do not fathom it, why am I persecuted here? I cannot offer one proposition but there be a howling riot of argument. I have often wondered if the Devil be in it somewhere; I cannot understand you people otherwise,” (The Crucible, p. 51, ).

 

Analysis (A):

Parris is described by John Proctor as “a broken minister.” Parris is supposed to be a minister, but instead, he just wants gold. He is outraged when he and John Proctor have a dispute about Parris’ payment. Parris is an extremely entitled, hypocritical man, and he refuses to give up on his claim. Paris is dead set that he is being underpaid, even though it can be inferred that he is in the wrong. Instead of admitting that he is wrong like an adult, he instead whines until Proctor walks away. He blatantly lies and goes back on a previous agreement to save his reputation. To an outsider hearing the story, it seems like he is standing up for himself while in reality, he is wailing until he gets his way. This proves that his reputation in his number one priority. He truly is a broken minister. Parris is also corrupt in the mind. As a minister and a Puritan, everything is supposed to be God first. It is faith that drives their society. Reverend Parris also kisses up to Judge Danforth 24/7. Whatever Danforth’s views are, Parris will pretend to agree. While doing this, he becomes trusted by Danforth. The whole colony see’s the affection Parris is receiving from Danforth, Parris becomes trusted as well. Parrus becomes unofficial right hand man of Judge Danforth. After multiple atrocious requests, such as gold candle sticks, Parris’ clout is becoming a major issue in the town afflicted by the false accusations of witchcraft.

 

Concluding/ Transition (C): Reverend Parris’ reputation first attitude towards life is extremely comparable to Joseph McCarthy.

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Paragraph #3: McCarthy/Red Scare Thematic Connection

 

Topic Sentence (T):

The McCarthy Era was a heinous act of scapegoating and false accusations by Joseph McCarthy in an effort to gain power and heighten his reputation.

 

Explanatory Sentence (E):

Joseph McCarthy enjoyed a short time of his highet of power and respect before he became a pathetic excuse and drank himself to death. Not only were his pitiful ways discovered, but his political backers turned on him.

 

Evidence (E):

“When reporters asked to see the list, McCarthy said he left it in his other suit, which was still on the plane. In fact, McCarthy did not have any list. He was basing his claims on a letter that had been written more than three years ago,” (McCarthyism, p. 43)

 

Analysis (A):

McCarthy’s power made him a major influence across the country. He was a power hungry man who only cared about himself and his reputation. McCarthy eventually pit neighbors against neighbors and friends against friends. He didn’t care about the grief he was causing as long as he stayed in power. This went too far, and McCarthy knew it. How would somebody so narcissistic and so greedy let go of that power and become the laughing stock of the country by admitting his wrongs? Joseph McCarthy certainly wouldn’t. There were two possible ways to get to the same outcome: becoming an ignominious piece of garbage. He chose riding the high life for as long as possible. After eight years, he drank himself to death from all the humiliation. It was a fitting end to this dismal mans life.

 

Concluding/ Transition (C):

McCarthy’s greed and narcissism was extremely harmful to many people. Just like Donald Trump today, his attitude is making countless people live in fear.

 

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Paragraph #4: Modern Day Witch Hunt Thematic Connection

 

Topic Sentence (T):

Donald Trump is an egotistical maniac who is extremely similar to Joseph McCarthy and Reverend Parris because his ego and reputation are more important to him than anything else.

 

Explanatory Sentence (E):

Instead of admitting his wrong doings, he blatantly lies and moves on, often literally leaving millions of people in awe.

 

Evidence (E):

“[Donald Trump] Spent five years refusing to admit that President Obama was born in the U.S.—and still hasn’t apologized,” (https://www.hillaryclinton.com/feed/things-donald-trump-has-said-and-done-that-in-a-normal-election-would-disqualify-a-nominee/)

 

Analysis (A):

Donald Trump’s false, discriminatory comments led to five years of repeatedly making false claims that President Obama was not born in the United States of America.

After Obama providing proof that he was born in America, Trump had two options: he could apologize and move on, or deny he ever made those false claims when there is video proof and multiple tweets that HE wrote stating that President Obama was not born in America. This proves what kind person Donald Trump is. Instead of being a good person and admitting his mistakes like a grown orange man, he put aside basic values and denied he said it all. This led to a hilarious press conference when President Obama took shots at Trump by playing The Lion King, jokingly playing along with Trump’s claims that he was born in Kenya, not America. Donald Trump doesn’t have basic values that almost everyone has. It goes past republican and democrat. He’s so bad that he has an approval rating under 40%, setting new records each day. In other words, he lost the approval of 10% of people that should approve of Trump. That’s more than three million people, which is more than people than Hillary Clinton won the popular vote by. Donald Trump is trying to use his reputation to take advantage of scared, hysterical people. The biggest difference about Trump is the time. This is 2017, and people have recourses to fact check Trump. There are reporters who ask him questions that he cannot answer because he is unfit to be president, but that is an argument for another time.

 

Concluding/ Transition (C): The biggest difference about Trump is the time. This is 2017, and people have recourses to fact check Trump. There are also reporters who ask him questions that he cannot answer time and time again because he is unfit to be president. When people are hysterical, it is short lived these days. People are scared of terrorism so they scapegoat all Muslim’s, but there is always another side. When there is hysteria, people will always jump in to defend those being targeted by the hysterical. Hysteria cannot become as widespread as it once was able to, but it can still have a big effect. Donald Trump created hysteria with his campaign, and he was able to capitalize on what he created to win the election and become the president of the United States.

 

(R):

Reverend Parris, Joseph McCarthy, and Donald Trump all display this perfectly. They put aside their morals and they do things that they know are wrong just for their personal benefit. These types of selfish, narcissistic people take advantage of widespread hysteria to gather even more people behind them, greatly heightening their reputation in the process.

(O):

During the Salem Witch Trials, Reverend Parris sided with Abigail Williams and the rest of Salem. Doing this, he got the entire town behind him and eventually became the unofficial right hand man of Judge Danforth. Joseph McCarthy took advantage of the hysteria surrounding communists and quickly rose from a nobody Senator to leading of multiple committees and becoming a major influential figure. Today, Donald Trump takes advantage of disempowered people everyday in an attempt to satisfy those who voted for him. People can fact check in the 21st century, and people definitely do. Donald Trump constantly makes false, discriminatory claims about everyone that is not exactly like him.

(C):

History never fails to repeat itself. Throughout American history, people like Reverend Parris, Joseph McCarthy and Donald Trump keep popping up. This keeps happening, even in today’s world. Hysteria always brings out to worst of us, but in the Trump Era, it is not affecting all of us. More than 60% of America disapproves off him and they will not be fed his false, atrocious comments. It is impossible for everybody to believe when we have the internet and mobile phones. If someone hears something that seems off, as things Trump says often do, they can pull out their phone and find the answer in a matter of seconds. Lies do not spread like wild fire anymore, but hysteria does. Less and less people each day stop approving of Donald Trump, but he is the president. He was able to fear monger and capitalize on the scared people whose emotions he created to get himself in the top political position in the world. He is not just marginalizing a small group of people, he is marginalizing religions, countries and genders. That includes Muslims, Mexico, Iraq, Syria, Libya, Iran, Somalia, Sudan, Yemen, women, lesbians, gay people, bisexual people, transgender people, queer people and disabled people. That is an uncountable percent of the world population, and this outrage must be put to an end.

 

Outline templates are extremely helpful when writing an essay. It helps you space out your work and know what to implement into different parts of the essay. Outlines are especially helpful when editing. When you go down the check list, the outline keeps everything organized so you know exactly where to edit and exactly what tat section should contain. The Crucible/McCarthy/Current Day essay outline is the same as the Giver. GIT/TEEAC/TEEAC/TEEAC/ROC is very helpful. It helps you cover everything you need to have in each of the paragraphs and it is easy to remember.

Humanities Notecard

Notecards

Notecard #1 Colonial Surgery

Source:

Tannenbaum, Rebecca J. “Health and Medicine in the 17th Century.” American Centuries , vol. 2, Facts on File, 2014. American History , online.infobase.com/HRC/Search/Details/358046?q=colonial%20surgery.

URL:

http://online.infobase.com/hrc/search/details/358046?q=colonial surgery

Quote:

Surgeons made up another category of trained healer. Surgery and medicine were considered separate fields, although the lines were beginning to blur and would eventually disappear altogether. Medicine, or “physick,” was an intellectual, gentleman’s skill; surgery was a manual trade, and thus had lower status. Many surgeons learned their skill in the military and continued to practice after their discharge. They set broken bones, removed cataracts, and amputated diseased or injured limbs.

Paraphrase:

Surgery and medicine were two different fields practiced by two different types of people: gentlemen and people of lower status. A lot of surgeons were trained in the military, but once they were discharged they continued their practice. Surgery in the 17th century was much less complex then surgery now, but many operations practiced back then are still done today.

My Ideas:

I think that non-religious surgical procedures were just taking off. That means that instead of praying and applying an herbal mix from God, surgeons were starting to amputate limbs. Surgery was getting more and more complex, and new discoveries were probably happening all the time. “Medicine, or “physick,”‘ probably meant doctors. I see why gentlemen did the easier, less gruesome tasks while people of lower status did the dirty work. Surgeons must have gotten paid less.

Vocabulary:

Cataract – A  cataract  is a clouding of the eye’s natural lens, which lies behind the iris and the pupil.  Cataracts  are the most common cause of vision loss in people over age 40 and are the principal cause of blindness in the world.

History:

Created: 10/09/2016 02:00 PM

Giver Essay Outline

Name: Wyatt Wolfman Humanities
7th Grade The Giver

Outline for GIVER LITERARY ESSAY

Themes: Knowledge & Rebellion

Paragraph #1: Introductory Paragraph (GIT)

Grabber Statement (G): In The Giver By Lois Lowry, Jonas is stuck in a (not so) perfect word.

Introduce Plot Summary (I): Jonas’s story is a heartbreaking one as he barely navigates the twists and turns of life in the community. When Jonas is selected as Receiver, his entire life changes. Can Jonas help the Receiver succeed in his grand plan for change?

Thesis Statement (T): This society is a dystopia because there are no choices. Everything you do is controlled and monitored by the elders of the community. This civilization is nowhere near perfect.

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Paragraph #2: Thematic Analysis

Topic Sentence (T): In the community, knowledge is kept to an absolute minimum to retain order.

Explanatory Sentence (E): There are only two people in the entire community that know the struggle of the past. Jonas and the Giver know every part of it. They know the hardship, but they also know of true happiness and joy.

Evidence (E): “Jonas stood alone in the center of the field. Several of the children raised their heads and looked at him uneasily. The attacking armies slowed, emerged from their crouched positions, and watched to see what he was doing. In his mind, Jonas saw again the face of the boy who had lain dying on a field and had begged him for water. He had a sudden choking feeling, as if it were difficult to breathe,” pg. 115.

Analysis (A): Ever since Jonas was selected as the new receiver, he knows of the past, and he is pained whenever anybody jokes about something that used to be dreadful. Jonas knows that war is not a game, and he knows that it leads to many, many deaths. He cannot stand the thought of people tossing around ideas of war as if it was a game, as they do not know a single part of it. Jonas is so irked even when people laugh about anything. He hates that they do not know the struggle.

Concluding/ Transition (C): Knowledge is dangerous and painful. Jonas and the Giver know that they should not be the only people who know the truth.

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Paragraph #3: Thematic Analysis Continued

Topic Sentence (T): Jonas and the Giver know that the inhumane practices of the community must be stopped.

Explanatory Sentence (E): The horrid and beautiful memories of the past were deemed too harsh for the community. So was diffrence. Everyone looks similar, they all have the same hair, they all eat the same food and there are only colorless hues. Jonas and the Giver are sick and tired of not being able to relate to anybody, and the fact that nobody but them knows about “real life”.

Evidence (E): “That’s true. And having you here with me over the past year has made me realize that things must change. For years I’ve felt that they should, but it seemed so hopeless,” pg. 126.

Analysis (A): The Giver and Jonas both want change. They feel that the community needs change, as life is so bland and unfair to the people. The Giver finally had someone to help execute his plan. Any time is as good as another to attempt this grand scheme, as life in the community is always the same.

Concluding/Transition (C): The community needs to change, and Jonas and The Giver know that they can make it happen.

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Paragraph #4: Concluding Paragraph (ROC)

Restatement of Thesis (R): Control runs this world of fantasy. People are tricked into believing they are living in a perfect world, while in fact the community is nothing but a dystopia. The civilians make no choices what so ever, giving the elders control over every aspect of life.

Overview of Main Points (O): Knowledge eventually destroys the souls of two important people, leading to rebellion. Jonas and the Giver want to give people the choices and rights that people deserve. This dehumanization must be abolished.

Concluding Sentence– Comparisons and Connections (C): We learned that Jonas and the Giver cannot and will not cope with with the struggles of memory anymore. They know that it is inhumane, and they want to change this. When Jonas and the Giver try to “liberate” the community, are they creating a better world?

My Poetry

I do not like poetry. Just like how I do not like Jacob Statorius. But here are a few of my poems.

Not Afraid:
Left for dead
You’ll die anyway,
they said
Here I am
I’m not dead
I’m not thriving
Barely surviving
But yet again,
I’m not dead

This is a poem I wrote inspired by the Revenant. It has repetition, line breaks and rhythm. This is my best and favorite poem. I thought of it really quickly and then edited it.

Sam Saslow:

Samsas
Young god, french fry
Always ballin’, unless
YAI YAI YAI YAI LING CHING
J Crew

This is a poem about Sam. It is a haiku. It has syllable count and it is funny. It is a silly poem, which can be good or bad.

五七五持:

今天我学了
我最喜欢的饮料
可乐和橙汁
Today I learned
My favorite drinks are
Coke and orange juice
(Jīn tiān wǒ xué le
wǒ zuì xǐhuan de yin liao
kě lè he cheng zhi)

This is a 5-7-5 poem in Mandarin. It is not a haiku because it is not about nature. It has character== count. It was hard to get the grammar right.

Shabanu News Cast

Murad*, a newly engaged man from Pakistan let us get a first-hand look at his life in a Pakistani farming village. Murad believes in Islam, as does everyone in his village and everyone from miles around. Western life is very different from living in the rural Middle East. For starters, money is worth less than sons or camels. In the Islamic Middle East, sons are much better because men can generate income while women are stuck in the house, or mud hut we should say. Camels are the main way of transportation and there is practically no police force.

“Islam is a very important part of my life. It is an important part of everyone’s life in the desert. Without religion, our world would be very hectic and empty. We are very religious,” Murad said. He made a very big statement about his religion and how important it is to him.

He also spoke about his person life. He was to be married to a Cholistian Nomad named Shabanu* , and Shabanu’s sister Phulan* was to marry his older brother Hamir. They were having problems with the landlord, so when Shabanu and Phulan ran into him, a fight arose. Hamir was shot, so everything changed. Murad is now going to marry Phulan, and Shabanu is going to marry Rahim*. “This is very sad and very challenging. I thought my life had a clear path, but the worst has happened. I must adapt. I really liked Shabanu. She is so confident, but Phulan is beautiful. This is just so shocking.

“It is very hard living where I live, but you get used to it. You tell me of police, and I am mesmerized. I cannot imagine a place where there are armed people everywhere, stopping the horrors of life. The Rangers are no help. They cannot enforce anything because there are so few and they have little power. If a rich man tells them to stop, they must obey. If we had police, my brother would still be alive. But you cannot change the past, you can only think about the future,”

*= Last names changed to protect interviewee.

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pakistani-muslim-wedding-atlanta-thismodernlove-43Preparing a Dowry

My beautiful daughter, Phulan is getting married this Ramadan. Her fiance is my nephew Hamir. I cannot wait for the wedding! I am praying for sons every day! But with only a few months left until the wedding, I still need to get the dowry finished! I do not even have half of the money, jewelry or clothes yet. That is why I have brought 15 of my finest camels to the Sibi fair. I have promised my youngest daughter, Shabanu that we will not sell our most exceptional camel, Gulaband, but the offers are tempting. The highest offers are from governments, but I will not sell Gulaband, only for him to die in war. Nevertheless, there are still good offers from people who actually care for their animals. I am leaning towards an offer from a herder who from Zhob. The deal on the table is 30,000 rupees for a bunch of females, a few calves. That is a good deal, I think as I accept. Right after, a man wants to buy Tipu for 18,000! Of course, that is a deal! I can only accept the highest deals, or else I will lose potential money. But those deals need to come fast because it costs 20 rupees a day just to feed them! You need every rupee for a good dowry! I am still very short of my goal, and my best camels are gone. I think I need to sell Gulaband, even against Shabanu’s will. I have my head in the clouds thinking of the offers I will get! I am so joyful, and Shabanu has done so well selling the saddles, I send her off to get food for a feast tonight! with my belly full, I drift off into sleep, only to be awakened by Wardak, and Afghan who wants the males, screaming. I go out, and after a lot more screaming and bargaining, the deal is done. For all the males, even Gulaband, I get 150,000 rupees! Shabanu comes out screaming, but I stop her before any harm is done. I am very pleased, as now I have almost completed the dowry!

How To Survive Life in the Desert

Life in the desert is very, very tough. From sandstorms to monsoon rains, here is a step by step guide on how to survive life in the desert:

Shelter: Mud huts are the best option. You do not want something too permanent, as you are constantly moving.
Food/Water: The toba dictates whether you are staying or moving. If your toba runs out of water, you must move. You need lots of water because that is where your whole herd drinks from. As far as food goes, you eat whatever is suitable. You eat chapatis for nearly every meal.

Monsoon Rains: The holy grail of desert life! You life off of the monsoons, as that is where you get your water.

Sandstorms: A very, very dangerous part of life in the desert. You must secure everything as fast as possible, and make sure everyone is with you. Tend to the herd if you can, but people are more important. If you get lost, tie you turban or chadr to the top of a tree and make a fetal position until you are found. Do not move.

Diary

Today was a rough day. My daughters escaped a bad situation, but my oldest daughter’s groom was killed. We had set up camp near Hamir’s settlement, and it was the afternoon. I sent Shabanu and Phulan to fetch some water, but the landlord, Nazir Mohammad saw them. He was going to rape them! Thinking on her feet, Shabanu threw her jar at him and ran, grabbing Phulan on the way. Mithoo ran back to camp, so we had to move! I told them to go back to Derawar, and I had Sher Dil take the animals. They had to get away, and I needed to settle this. I grabbed a gun from the tent and ran to find Hamir. Nazir Mohammad has already killed a few men, and he would kill each of them without a thought. Still, my family needed to live. Nazir Mohammad was the only one mad, but he has all the power. After a lot of screaming, he killed Hamir, saying, “That is your price.” I quickly got on a camels back and had him run all the way to the camp. When I broke the news, Phulan was devastated. I am grateful to still be alive.

Poetry

For fourth quarter writing, we are learning about poetry. So far we have learned a lot about different types of poems like cinquains and haiku’s, and how to write them. In Mandarin for Poem in Your Pocket day, we wrote a 五七五持. That means 5-7-5 poem. It is not a haiku because it is not about nature. A challenge doing the 五七五持 was that syllables do no mean anything in Chinese. Each character has pinyin, but it is only one syllable each, so instead of 5-7-5 syllables, we did 5-7-5 characters.

My 五七五持:

今天我学了
我最喜欢的饮料
可乐和橙汁

That means
Today I learned
My favorite drinks are
Coke and orange juice

Cinquain

Yeezus:

Yeezys
Comfortable, Hype
Not for running, only for walking and talking
On my feet in my dreams
Expensive

Haiku

Willie Mays:

All time great… there he goes!
Like a fly escaping the swatter
Running, running, gone

My Fact to Fiction Piece

Fact to Fiction Story:

My tank was on. I checked my regulator. Everything was working. I turned my flashlight on and entered the water. It was colder than in the day, but not by much. The island I was on only had two seasons: summer, and hurricane season.

I signaled ok to the instructor and put my head under the water. I couldn’t see much, as the only light was the other divers flashlights. Tureen, the instructor said that we could start our descent. One meter, two meters, three meters… 12 meters.

The bottom. Now we could see a lot more. It is almost like there are two different ecosystems that have shifted. The first shift is the things that you expect to see, and the second shift is more sea urchins, sharks, sting ray, sea turtles, squid and more. It’s crazy to see the change. We swam around for a bit before Tureen motioned for everybody to turn off their lights and be still. The uncountable amounts of plankton started to light up. They were like stars in the sky. It was beautiful. After, I quickly pointed my flashlight at a rock. Anybody who was just glancing at it would not have noticed it. It was the fin of a fish, just part of it. The first thought that registered through my head was barracuda, as you commonly see them off the coast of St. Barth. It probably was. They eat other fish. But the marks on the fin were farther apart. I had a nagging suspicion in the back of my head. Shark. Not a nurse shark or something small, a great white. They are extremely rare in St. Barth, but Tureen has bumped into them before. A few seconds later, I saw a trail of blood. I knew I was right. You can’t talk when you are diving, so I would have to signal that it was there. If I gave the symbol that means you see a shark, which is always a nurse shark or a blue shark, he would think it was one of those. I needed to figure out a way to signal great white shark. I swam over to Tureen and tapped his shoulder. I put my hand on my head like it was a fin, (the symbol for the sharks I commonly see) and then took my arms and made them look like giant jaws. He got the point. He got everybody together, which took about 10 minutes. Just then some of our lights were blocked out. I looked up. There it was. Not five feet above me. A 12 foot long great white shark. I pointed up and gradually everybody turned their heads. Even in the dim light, I could still barely make out the looks on people’s faces. Scared. Horrified. They probably think that they are going to die. I think that I might too, but we are underwater and in a group so the shark probably won’t approach us. Probably.

Just in case the shark attacks, it’s better to get back on the boat. But that will take some time as your body needs to decompress. I can see the gears in Tureens mind working overtime. I glance at somebody’s pressure gauge, the way you can tell how much air you have. It is already in the reserve air. That’s true for probably everybody except Tureen. I look at mine. It’s in reserve too. He puts us into groups of three. My group has Tureen, so we go up last. We go three by three, the shark circling around us. Each time it comes around its laps got shorter. And shorter, and shorter. I start to go up. So does the rest of my group. We stop to decompress and start our rise to the surface again. We do this a few times. My dad is the first to break the surface in my group. Then me. Then Tureen. I swim as fast as I can to the boat. I don’t even take my fins off. Everybody’s faces are a deathly white, and they are telling stories about what they saw and what they felt. I got a coke and walked to the bow. I was the only person there. We started moving. I was getting sprayed with spindrift as we started going faster. Tureen walked over to me and said a quick thank you.

THE END

This is the first piece we wrote this year, and it is my favorite. This is a bad thing because to me it says that I have not improved that much over the course of the year. That could be true, because I do not like creative writing and I don’t give it my all. I do really like this piece because scuba diving is one of my favorite things to do, and over spring break I got a better certification that is also international.