Dash’s weekend paragraph
My weekend was incredible because I got a new pair of Jordan’s, I found $20 in a cab, And the New York Giants won.
I got these limited edition sneakers that are ovo retro 12s.Drake the rapper owns ovo which stands for October’s very own. There is another brand by the player Michael jordan who makes the shoe . Jordan and ovo teamed up to do these.
Evidence: I got a email saying the shoes were being released soI I ran over I went to a store called Kith with my dad we waited in line for 30 minutes that was a very long 30 minutes it felt like 30 hours, and we got two pairs I was super happy because I am a shoe collector so these are very important to have.
Analysis:) These shoes made my weekend because I have wanted these for a very long time and it is important to me as a collector so I can look at them see what’s new, types of soles, different leathers and so on
Conclusion (Transition): At last The guy handed me the shoes and I was the happiest boy on earth they are so cool and I can’t wait to exam and I am living happily ever after with them!
I really like how you described the shoes. You made me want too get them from the way you talked about them. Maybe re-read the 2nd sentence.