Revision means looking over again and editing. It also means adding on and including more.

Before I edited my work there were a lot of places  were I could have added more detail. There were also a lot of places were I did not have strong vocab. I also could have added more parts with my theme about the power of story telling. I added this editing  after I got feedback from Julia to have stronger vocab and be more descriptive.  My writing partner also told me to incorporate more from my story arc such as adding more about the desert part.