Diana Son Visits: A Lesson in Screenwriting

“You made writing sound easy but when I write in our script it is not as easy as you make it sound!”

May 11, 2017 Dear Ms Son, Thank you for coming in. I really enjoyed your story about being a writer and what advice you gave us. I think you helped our grade out on the play with what you said (or at least some of us) I really wanted you to stay after and look at our scripts and us acting them out I think you could give us some really good feedback. My favorite part of your visit was when you told the story of why you became a writer. I liked how you were known for your brother and all your teacher would say “You’re (Gasp!) Grant – Son’s sister!” But you wrote about your family instead of your toys and stuff and your teachers thought yours was the most thoughtful so you became a writer. I liked the scene you showed us from “Love is a Four Letter Word,” and when you talked about how much you can learn about a person in so little time. Your advice about how much you write over your script and find typos and places to add things for improvement was helpful.  I really thought it was good asking us questions about what was going on in our play and how the people changed. I liked when you told us about adding action in your words and how to do it. You made writing sound easy but when I write in our script it is not as easy as you make it sound! I think all of your advise will make it much easier to now write our script. We can make it sound better than it was before you came in. Again thank you so much for coming in. Love from your son NATE ______________________________________________________________________

“You made me think really deeply about that one minute scene, and I hadn’t really thought about TV that way before.”

May 11th, 2017 Dear Diana Son, Thank you for coming in to talk to our grade. I thoroughly enjoyed your visit. By the way, I have an older friend who watches “13 Reasons Why,” and she loves it! I was taking notes on your visit, and I was in the very back. I really enjoyed the clip that you played for us. You made me think really deeply about that one minute scene, and I hadn’t really thought about TV that way before. I normally watch TV with my parents, and in our everyday lives we will talk about the show. We will think about a character’s feelings or the relationships they have. We are in the seventh season of the show, and at this point they got a new creator/writer. It was fun to see how the show changed between writers. Have you ever watched a show where they changed creators and the show drastically changed? As you know, we are writing a play that will be performed in early June. My group was having a little (a lot) of trouble being a team and joining our ideas together. We are trying to make our lines very informative (but still sound like a conversation) while still making it appropriate for all ages. We have a tricky subject (the Great Migration, a very violent, upsetting period) and you helped me think of ways to portray characters feelings and personalities through dialogue, which is the most important thing at the moment as we are writing the script. You helped me get around the tricky stuff, and focus on what is important at the moment, just by talking to us. Thank you again. I think that your story is really cool, and just by watching that clip I can tell that you are a great writer!!!!!! I have a question for you. How long did it take to write the longest script you’ve ever written? Thanks again!! Margot Story _______________________________________________________________________

“How do you get a baby in the scene? Do you just pick a baby off of the street?”

Dear Diana, Thank you for coming to our classroom to tell us suggestions on the immigration play! I think it helped the fourth grade when you told us tips and modifications. My favorite part of the visit was when Zen asked you this question:  “How do you get a baby in the scene? Do you just pick a baby off of the street?” And then you explained the whole audition process. Thank you for coming!   Sincerely, Yves ______________________________________________________________________

“From that one minute scene I could get a sense of the character’s personalities and feelings.”

Dear Diana, Thank you for coming in to teach us more about writing a play. I think you gave us very good advice and had great answers to our questions. I also think you gave us great solutions to our problems. I think you did a really great job giving advice. The best piece of advice I thought you gave was how to turn a bunch of lines into a scene, my group was having some trouble with that. I am thinking hard about your advice and I think it will definitely make our script better.   My favorite part of what you said was how your teacher said she would hang your work up but never did. Even though it’s sort of sad she never hung it up, the way you said it while telling the story made me laugh. I think that you are a great writer. From that one minute scene I could get a sense of the character’s personalities and feelings. I enjoyed listening to you speak I hope you enjoyed speaking to us! Sincerely, Makeda  ]]>

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Mark is thrilled to be a member of LREI's vibrant learning community and is inspired each day by students and colleagues alike. Mark began his formal adult life in schools as a teacher of physics, chemistry, English and an experiential business simulation class in the public schools where he also worked as a school administrator and technology coordinator. For the ten years prior to coming to LREI, Mark was a co-founder and co-director of a progressive K-12 public charter school. When not immersed in things LREI, Mark enjoys spending time with his family and completing sundry home repair projects. He is an avid soccer player and skier and wishes he had more time to play the guitar and bass.

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