This is a picture of me jumping off a boulder into Emerald Pools in New Hampshire! It was freezing cold! It was mountain water so that is why it was that cold. Everyone jumped off. It was so much fun! It felt really good since the day before that we hiked Mt. Washington.
Sounds fun! Maybe you should add a little bit more.
That seems so fun in swimming in freezing water
I think you could have added more about the Emerald Pool and the ride there and stuff like that.
I really like your post. Where were you? It seemed really fun but you didn’t tell us who you were with or why, It was a little short. But your post was really interesting and you told us a lot. I got a great image in my head.