I think we should have the cheese idea because it sounds organized and we all could each have turns taking a bite of cheese. I know the planner is going to be shaped like a cheese, but some cheese have holes and without the holes its just going to look like a triangle or a square. So my idea is to write the stuff we have for homework inside of the holes. Also where are we going to write the days of the week. If you are going to do swiss cheese with holes dosent that kind of cheese go diagonal. So if the cheese was diagonal than the words are going to be diagonal to and then it would be hard to write.
September 30, 2014
Planner Idea
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Clair
October 15, 2014 — 1:37 pm
Milei,
Thanks for sharing! A few quick notes:
-“But one thing I know the planner is going to be shaped…” read this sentence out loud to yourself. Does it sound as clear as it could?
-“in side” should be one word– “inside”
-Your last sentence is a bit of a run on sentence (it has too many ideas and not enough periods or commas.) Take a look at it and read it out loud to yourself. Everywhere that you’d take a pause for breath, or a moment should be a comma or a period. Rewrite that sentence in at least two sentences.
Make these small changes, update the post, and you’ll be all set!
Thanks for sharing!
Clair