This summer I realized that you can learn even when you’re not sitting in a classroom. I learned how to do many new things, including: being responsible for myself and others, how to make friends more quickly, and how to entertain myself with no electronic devices.
This summer I saw a lot of things. The most interesting things I saw were fish swimming underneath me in Bermuda. The most scary thing I saw was the edge of The Leap Of Faith, a really steep waterside in the Bahamas. The best things I saw were friends that I haven’t seen in a long time.
This summer I discovered bunch of new things. I discovered a new restaurant called Snow Days. They sell this thing that is kind of like a snow cone and kind of like ice cream. I discovered what it is like to be away from home for a long time.
This summer I built many new things. I built strong relationships with new people. I built my skills in squash, art, dance, gaga, and lots of other things. I built my ideas of the world. I built new emotions.
This summer I visited two different countries. I went to the Bahamas with my whole family. That includes my aunts, uncles, cousins, my grandpa, and my mom. It was really fun to be with everyone all at once because I don’t get to see everyone at once very often. I went to Bermuda with my mom for two days. I really enjoyed spending some quality time with my mom because before I went to Bermuda I hadn’t really had any of that.
This summer I experienced learning, seeing, discovering, building, and visiting. I experienced climbing up and down a cliff. It was like life, there are high points and low points. I experienced making new friends. I experienced climbing a rock wall at camp. I experienced trying oysters for the first time.
While I did all these thing this summer I felt lots of different emotions. I felt older when I learned to be responsible for myself and others. I felt scared when I looked off the edge of the Leap Of Faith. I felt excited when I built new relationships. I felt really happy when I saw my whole family together. I felt strong when I climbed up a cliff. I felt bitter sweet when I realized summer was pretty much over.
I really liked it, but i think you should have added external and internal writing and not leaning towards one also why does it say “these things” at the end of paragraph 1
Emma, I like how you mention that you can learn so much outside of the classroom. You are absolutely right about that. It certainly sounds like your summer was a memorable one, and I enjoyed reading about it.