by Kate and Cooper
In September 2013 Deborah and Jake’s fourth grade class took a field trip to Prospect Park in Brooklyn. They saw this bird 
branches were down to the ground. When Deborah’s class was leaving they stood next to a tree and took a photo of themselves.
Alot of kids were more familiar with Central Park because they live near there so it was nice to learn about Prospect Park and to just get out and see nature and get out and play. At the end there was extra time to go to the playground and have some run around time to get the silliness out of our bodies.
Over all most of the class liked the field trip! Some people in the class who hated bugs and nature but loved video games ended up enjoying themselves and wanting more field trips like that one!
I think that you should describe what we did a little bit more.
sorry I was logged into emma h the comment above was mine
I think thar you did a good job but like Emma H. said you should describe a little more about the whole thing
oh and I ment that not thar
I loved that field trip! I also remember that bird!
I remember when I was running around by the water and I slipped and I almost fell into the water.
I remember making a poster. And I lead the trip.
You did a great job! I have a few corrections though… There were a bunch of typos like you didn’t capitalize some letters… Also you could’ve added more details… Good job though!
I think this is explained so well that I feel like I am there. I also think you should explain it better.
I like the way you described the trip. For example when you said the sticks were on the ground when we left.
I think you should explain more about the bird. All you said we saw this bird, then moved on to a different topic.
cooper,I like how you added two pictures.