One thing that I think I did well while writing my essay was choosing evidence that really proved the point I was trying to make. this is important in an essay because the whole point is that you are proving a point. One thing I could have done better on was checking my work and editing because if I had edited I would have gotten a better grade.

Over winter break I went skiing at Otis Ridge Ski Mountain. I learned how to powder ski and how to do freestyle jumps off of rocks and snow banks. I also spent time with a friend of mine that I haven’t seen in a while, we went and saw two movies and played on the frozen lake behind his house. I also had a massive nerf battle at my mom’s friend from high school’s house.