I have written two essays so far this year. I think the first essay I wrote was stronger because I had more time to write it. I think a strength I have when writing essays is analyzing the evidence that I include. In my more recent essay about American Born Chinese, I decided to change the structure of the essay. I think this caused me to steer too far away from the book and not connect the book in my analysis enough. Another strength I have is using correct spelling and punctuation. Something I think I can improve on is writing good introductions and conclusions to leave the reader thinking. Overall, I think my writing has improved a lot this year, but it can still become better.
Category Archives: Humanities
Africans In NY: Creative Narrative Assignment
Born Into Slavery
I feel the snow and cold wind hit my face as I trek up the icy hill. Both of my hands hold metal buckets, weighed down with water from the pump. I need to get back to my master’s warm house on Broadway. My fingers are numb from holding the frigid metal buckets and my arms ache from carrying the water for so long. The snow is hitting my cold face and I can barely see ahead of me. I finally make it up the hill and I can see the house in the distance. My feet sink deeper and deeper into the snow as I grow closer to the warm house. I walk up the snow covered stone path and go around to the back door. The enslaved aren’t allowed through the front. I walk through the small wooden door and feel the warmth of the house. I smell fresh meat cooking in the oven and see the indentured servant, Hazel, swiftly sweeping the wooden floor. I look out the small window on the left side of the kitchen and see the pinky orange color of the sun setting in the sky. Then I see my master, Henry Lloyd, slowly walk into the kitchen.
“You! Go help with my family business in my office!” He screams at me.
I don’t respond, but quickly walk out of the room and into his stuffy office. My master doesn’t refer to me as Jupiter because in his eyes, I’m not a person. He thinks of me as his property and he can do whatever he wants to me. I believe that a brutal master is only tamed by respect and obedience from a slave. This is why I continue to serve my master well. I snap out of my thoughts when I see my master at the door to the cramped office. I quickly pull out a stack of papers with information about the patriots. My master is a patriot, which means I have to be one too. Deep down I know that if I were allowed my own choice, I would be a loyalist. When I was young, my master hired a Harvard graduate to teach me how to read and write. I pick up the feather from my master’s desk and dip it into the black ink. I know I’m supposed to working, but I can’t help myself. I pull the handle to the desk drawer and it creaks. I grab a piece of white paper and place it down on the desk. I pick up the feather and begin to write the date, January 16, 1769. Then I write the first line of the poem. I use poetry as a way of resisting slavery and teaching others about my religion, Methodism. I move the feather swiftly across the page because the words come to me fast. I look up every couple of seconds to make sure my master doesn’t catch me. If I was caught writing poetry while I was supposed to be doing labor, I would be whipped. When I finish my poem, I tiptoe out of the office hoping my master doesn’t see me. I keep a small wooden chest in the main room of the house. This is one of the only things that I can still call mine. I keep all my poetry and a copy of my book in this small box. I am one of the first negroes to be published in New York. My book explains God’s beliefs about equality. God loves every person that loves and obeys him no matter who they are. I don’t write as much about my views on slavery and freedom because religion is the most important thing no matter the circumstances. Although I have been enslaved my whole life, I feel privileged to have had the education that I received. Without it, I wouldn’t have been able to write poetry and get my point across about Methodism. I quickly place my poem in the chest and walk back to the office. By now it is dark outside and Hazel is finished preparing the fresh meat. She must be putting it out on the table for my master because the smell gets stronger and stronger. The salty smell of the meat reminds me of my mother and her cooking.
When I was a young boy my mother told me many stories of her voyage to New Amsterdam (present day New York). It was a hot summer morning in Angola and my mother was eating her breakfast at the table. Her favorite cloth was covering the wooden table as she ate. The sun was beginning to shine through the window as it rose above the horizon. My mother was thinking about the happy and eventful day ahead of her when she saw a white man outside her house. He had dark thick hair and a mustache. He held a large gun in his hands. My mother had never seen a white man in real life; she had only heard of them. My mother stood up from her meal and approached the window to get a better look at him. Something about the look on his face made her feel powerless and scared. The man suddenly began to run towards the direction of her house. She wanted to continue to watch the man, but her instincts told her to hide. She quickly pulled her white blinds shut and ran behind the table. She tugged the table cloth down so she would be out of sight and her breakfast fell to the ground. The glass plate shattered, but she didn’t care. Maybe I’m being paranoid, she said to herself. But just as that crossed her mind she heard a loud bang as the door to her house was shoved open. My mother saw the man’s black boots and her heart began to beat out of her chest. The worst scenarios possible began to run through her mind and tears streamed down her cheeks. My mother tried as hard as she could to stay silent, but she couldn’t contain her fear and sadness.
“Come out now or I’ll shoot you!” he yelled at her.
My mother’s whole body froze when she heard these words. She slowly peeked her head out from behind the table and the man grabbed her. She screamed, but it was no use. My mother had no husband until she arrived in New Amsterdam so there wasn’t anyone to risk themselves for her safety. She was forcefully pulled outside and chained up. Then my mother was shoved into a large group of other Africans.
“Walk that way! Now!” the white man yelled from behind her.
She began to take small steps in the direction the man was pointing.
“Faster!” he screamed at the top of his lungs.
My mother jumped as he screamed, but then began walking quicker. She was forced to walk for a full week. My mother told me that the white man called this the death march because many Africans lost their lives along the way. When my mother finally arrived at the slave port, located on the Gold Coast, she was boarded a slaver. The conditions on the ship were horrendous and my mother suffered during the ten weeks she was on it. She wasn’t fed enough and she almost starved to death. There were too many people on the boat and disease spread among the passengers. Many Africans even attempted to jump overboard because they believed death was better than living through the horrid situation they were in. When the ship finally sailed up the Hudson River and into New Amsterdam, about only half of the original group of Africans were still living. When my mother stepped off the ship she took a deep breath. She had been trapped on the boat for so long that she was grateful for a breath of fresh air. My mother lost her feeling of gratitude when she saw an African being sold like chattel a few feet in front of her. She then felt a cold hand on her back and was pushed toward a couple dressed in fancy clothing. They purchased her and brought her to their home on Long Island. After many years of being owned by this couple, she gave birth to me in 1711.
This is my Africans in NY: Creative Narrative Assignment. In this assignment every seventh grader was assigned a biography of an African that lived during the Colonial Era. From this biography and optional extra research we had to write a piece in the point of view of this person. We had to have at least 7 social studies key terms and at least 5 facts about our person. My African’s name was Jupiter Hammon. I think I did a good job of including description in my piece. I used the show don’t tell technique, which helps the reader understand what is happening better. I think I could have done a better job of looking over my work and finding grammatical mistakes. When I got this piece back there were a few errors that I probably could have fixed if I read over my work one more time. Overall, I really enjoyed this assignment and am excited for more pieces like it in the future.
Humanities Comparative Essay
Emma Diamond Humanities 7th Grade March 6th, 2017
Integrity Versus Reputation
We live in a world where people will do almost anything to make themselves look better. Many people will even compromise their integrity in order to gain a better reputation. Integrity is a set of unwritten rules that make someone a good person. People compromise their integrity to make themselves look better because reputation is a representation of power. Sometimes people in power lie as a way of making themselves look better and creating a better reputation for themselves. Most people like power and want to control others. This need for power can lead people to do things that compromise their integrity. This has occurred during the Salem Witch Trials, the McCarthy Era, and even the present day. Throughout history, people have compromised their integrity in order to create a better reputation for themselves.
In The Crucible, by Arthur Miller, many characters compromise their integrity in order to save and make their reputation better. Throughout the play, Abigail Williams continually lies in order to protect her reputation. When Abigail is accused of being a witch, she and her family lose a lot of their power and their reputation goes down the drain. When Parris, her uncle, finds out about this, he denies that there is witchcraft in his household in order to uphold his good reputation. “PARRIS, his eyes going wide: No-no. There be no unnatural cause here. Tell him I have sent for Reverend Hale of Beverly, and Mr. Hale will surely confirm that. Let him look to medicine and put out all thought of unnatural causes here. There be none,” (Miller, pg. 35). As soon as someone brought up witchcraft in his household, he denied it. If he had not shut down this idea right away, people would have stopped trusting and believing what he said. In this time period, a good reputation represented power. Everyone wanted power and influence, so they needed to uphold and preserve their good reputations. Since Abigail was the one who compromised Parris’ reputation, he felt she disobeyed him. Abigail did not want to ruin her own or Parris’ reputation so she lied and blamed Tituba for her mistakes. “ABIGAIL: She made me do it! She made Betty do it! TITUBA, shocked and angry: Abby! ABIGAIL: She makes me drink blood!” (Miller, 1953). When Abigail did something bad, she was faced with the decision of keeping her integrity or lying. She chose to lie because she did not think anyone would find out that she was lying and that she wouldn’t have to suffer the consequences for her mistakes. Not only did she lie, but she scapegoated someone else for her own mistakes. Tituba did not force her to do anything in the forest, but she blamed her anyway. Abigail did not care what happened to Tituba as long as she herself wasn’t to blame for what happened. In the play, John Proctor was hanged because he lied, but Tituba wasn’t for seeing the devil. Telling the truth is usually the better option when someone is put in a situation where they have to choose between the two. Many people lied to make themselves look better in the 1600s and as history progressed it continued to happen.
In the book Lord of the Flies, by William Golding, many boys lie and exaggerate in order to make themselves look better in the eyes of their peers. Because of the setting and stereotypes about men, reputation and power are based on masculinity and strength. Men did and still do have pre set ways that they are supposed to act just because of their gender. Because of this, some men feel like they have to be strong and powerful in order to be appreciated by society. Throughout the book, a character named Jack tries to seem strong and powerful by killing a lot of pigs and over-exaggerating the killings. “There was lashings of blood,” said Jack, laughing and shuddering, “you should have seen it!” (Golding, pg. 63). This is an example of Jack over exaggerating the goriness of the killing of a pig to appear more masculine. Ultimately, Jack’s focus on killing a pig instead of keeping a fire burning, prevents the boys from being rescued when a ship passes. This shows that being the most masculine isn’t always the best thing, especially in a survival situation. If the boys on the island had not been so obsessed with their reputations, they probably would have been rescued earlier. Most of the boys wanted to be the most powerful so they tried to seem strong and masculine. Throughout the book, the boys try to impress each other by killing and hurting animals and people. When Jack exaggerates about killing the pig, many boys consider him a role model and someone to look up to. Although the boys are constantly doing things to make them look more masculine, they probably do not always want to behave this way. Many of the boys lied about their feelings to make themselves look stronger and more masculine. For example, one of the boys, Ralph, said that he wasn’t afraid of the beastie even though he was. Since he was the chief, he probably did this to maintain his reputation as a good leader and impress the rest of the boys. The boys in the book, Lord of the Flies, compromised their integrity in order to make their reputation better, as did the real people living during the 1950s.
During the 1950s, many people did things that compromised their integrity just to improve their reputation. Most people wanted a good reputation so that they could gain power. Some wanted this so badly that they compromised their integrity in order to get it. Joseph McCarthy spent time in the military and lied about his accomplishments. “McCarthy often exaggerated his war record to help his political career. For example, he was photographed in the rear seat, or tail fun position, of a dive bomber and called himself ‘Tail-Gunner Joe,” (The Red Scare, Fitzgerald, 2007). This is an example of McCarthy lying to make his reputation better. During the 1950s, reputation for men was usually based off strength and masculinity. By lying about his position in the war, he was showing everyone how masculine he was and gaining a better reputation. By the 1950s, people were more tolerant towards other religions because the Constitution says that freedom of religion is a protected right. This meant that there was no government punishment for lying because people had different beliefs, values and ethics. Since this was true, McCarthy did not have to worry about extreme consequences like death for over exaggerating the truth. If people had found out that he lied, his reputation probably would have gone down the drain. Although there was no law against lying, most people looked at it as a bad thing. It did not make sense for McCarthy to lie about this, even though it could make him look more masculine. If people had found out, he wouldn’t have had as much power and influence. This shows that lying is risky because if people do not find out that one has lied, there is no consequence. If people do find out, it could lead to loss of a good reputation and power, especially if they are a leader. People have compromised their integrity for a better a reputation in the 1950s as well as today.
Today, people are still compromising their integrity in order to create a better reputation for themselves. The new President of the United States, Donald Trump, has continually lied to make himself look better. During a recent press conference, he said something that is completely false in order to make him seem better than other Presidents. “‘I guess it was the biggest electoral college win since Ronald Reagan,’ he said during a heated press conference at the White House. Former President Bill Clinton received more electoral votes than Trump during both of his elections, as did former President George H.W. Bush in 1988,” (Rebecca Savransky). In this quote, Donald Trump is lying to make himself look better. This is different than when McCarthy and Abigail lied because everyone found out that Trump was lying. Therefore, his original intention to make his reputation better, backfired and actually made it worse. This shows how difficult and dicey lying is because it could either make one’s reputation a lot better or a lot worse. In this case, Donald Trump’s lies were proven wrong, which exposed him to all of the United States and other countries too. Even if Trump actually believed what he was saying was correct, as the President of the United States, he should have known the facts. Since he has recently been handed a lot of power, people have a lot of trust in him, which makes it even more important for him to be telling the truth. Donald Trump is taking advantage of his power by disregarding the fact that many people have trust him and believe what he is saying. If he continues to lie, some people will stop trusting what he says. This will show him that he has to tell the truth if he wants to have a good reputation. During Trump’s campaign many people even said they liked him because he told the truth. If he continues to constantly lie to make himself look better, these people might begin to dislike him also. Overall, Donald Trump has failed at lying to make his reputation better because people found out that his thoughts were false.
Many people lie and deceive others in order to make themselves look better and gain power. This happened during the Salem Witch Trials, the McCarthy Era, and even the present day. In all three cases, leaders have compromised their integrity to gain even more power. When they do this and people find out that they were lying, their followers lose trust in them. Lying can backfire and actually make one’s reputation worse instead of better. If people accepted who they are and did not exaggerate and lie about their achievements, this wouldn’t be a recurring problem. History is continually repeating itself, which shows a lack of progress in America. Will people ever solve this problem, or will it continue to happen in the future?
This is an essay that I wrote recently in humanities. In this assignment we had to compare the Salem Witch Trials, the McCarthy Era, and the present day using a theme. The Salem Witch Trials took place during the 1600s. In this time, many people were accused of being witches. The McCarthy Era took place during the 1950s. In this time, people were accused of being communists and most Americans were scared of Russians. The theme I chose was compromising integrity for reputation. This was important throughout all three time periods. Leaders often compromise their integrity to make their reputation better. During the process of writing this essay, I learned that making connections about history and the present day help me understand both better. I also learned that I am getting pretty good at writing TEEAC paragraphs. It is easier for me to write a TEEAC paragraph without an outline than with one. I think I can work a little bit more on making some parts of my essay more detailed. I think I can do this by reading over my essay again and asking myself what could be more clear. I think I could work a little bit more on my transition sentences and connect them more to the next paragraph. Throughout this essay I believed that I have mastered writing a thesis statement and making connections throughout different times in history. Overall, I really enjoyed writing this essay!
My Best NoodleTools Notecard
Below is a research notecard I did on a website called NoodleTools. A notecard is all about a specific topic within my research topic. My topic is music and dance. I am proud of this notecard because I had a strong analysis and I used a primary source.
English Rules of the Balls
Source:
From the First Assembly minute book, 1746. “Speaking of Dancing.” Colonial Williamsburg , history.org/history/teaching/speakdan.cfm. Accessed 2 Nov. 2016.
Quote:
“No Lady to be admitted in a nightgown and no gentleman in boots.
Dancing is to begin precisely at 5 o’clock afternoon in the winter.
Each set not to exceed ten couples to dance but one country dance.
Couples to dance their minuets in the order they stand in their individual sets.
No dance to begin after 11 at night.
No tea, coffee, negus or other liquor to be carried into the dancing room.”
Paraphrase:
- balls were fancy meaning nobody was allowed without proper attire.
- There were specific times when dancing is to begin and end.
- In this case the dancing was to begin at 5 o’clock on the dot and end before 11 o’clock.
- There was a certain amount of couples allowed to dance at a time.
- In this case 10 couples were allowed.
- Certain things like drinks were certain things not allowed in the dance room.
My Ideas:
As showed by this primary source, the English people had many rules about music and dance in the colonial period. Some of these rules make sense to me, but most of them seem like they were made for the sake of being made. The rule that makes sense is “No Lady to be admitted in a nightgown and no gentleman in boots.” This makes sense because dinner dances were extremely fancy and important to the English people. This means they would want everyone dressed for the formal event correctly. The other rules are confusing because they are very strict. The Powhatans and Africans didn’t have strict rules for their dances and music like the English did. They had specific dances, but nothing that restricted certain times of the day or how many people can dance at a time. I infer the enslaved Africans didn’t have rules about dance because they didn’t have time to come up with them and it would be really hard for them to follow rules while they were being forced to do work all day. The enslaved people would probably dance whenever they had the chance and it wouldn’t be for entertainment. The meaning of African slaves dancing was to send messages about surviving, getting through the day, and escaping. The Powhatans danced mostly for ceremonial reasons and probably had rules about which dances to do at which ceremonies. I wonder why the English people had all these rules. Maybe it is because they wanted to be proper and precise with everything. Throughout my research it has become clear to me that the English people cared a lot more about appearance than any of the other two cultures. For example wealthy, English children had to learn all the dances perfectly or they would be embarrassing their whole family. In the other cultures people learned the dances by seeing them and being around them forever. I wonder if dancing was fun for the English colonists. I also wonder why we don’t have fancy dances or rules about our arts today. When did this stop happening? I infer this stopped happening when people realized there was no point in having unnecessary rules and that having unique arts are important. This kind of reminds me of The Giver by Lois Lowry because it shows that difference is good and rules should be as limited as possible without the world being unsafe and chaotic. It is clear that the English people were expected to follow many rules and guidelines about their arts.
My Best M13 HW
Below is Making 13 Colonies number four. I am proud of this because it demonstrates my ability to write strong TEEAC paragraphs. I think I have improved on writing TEEAC paragraphs by having M13 homework because it gives a chance to practice my skills.
Homework
Read chapter 4 in Making Thirteen Colonies and answer the following questions using complete sentences. Be sure to use textual evidence and analysis for each question. Each answer should be a full TEEAC paragraph.
- Describe the significance of the year 1607, using the following terms: The London Company, King James, and the name of the 3 boats. Be sure to clearly explain each of these terms within your paragraph.
The year 1607 was the beginning of our country. In England many Gentleman and Younkers were boarding ships to come to America. They were doing so because everything they ever knew to be true was proven wrong by Nicolas Copernicus and Galileo Galilei. “The ships were Susan Constant, the Discovery, and the Godspeed, and they had been sent from England by a business corporation called the London Company,” (Hakim, pg. 25). The name Godspeed for one of the ships is surprising because God was a huge part of English life and items weren’t usually named after him. This means that the ship was considered very important. King James owned The London Company, which was paying settlers to go to the New World and start a colony. The London Company told the colonists that they weren’t allowed to own property. They didn’t want individuals owning land because that could give them independence. If people were on their own they could become very wealthy and King James wouldn’t make all the money. The London Company also paid everyone the same amount no matter how much work they did. It will be interesting to see if the English settlers accepted the fact that they got paid the same amount no matter how much work they did.
- Describe the the terrain and the geography of the English fort.
The English had a very well designed fort in Jamestown, Virginia. Once the colonists got to the New World, they had to choose a place to settle. They chose a place in Virginia that they would soon name Jamestown after their King. “Jamestown was almost an Island, with a narrow sandbar link to the mainland,” (Hakim, pg. 27). The land being like this was good for the English because it was easier to defend against the Spaniards (if they decided they wanted to fight) and the Indians. The English fort included many things to help them survive. First, they had a ditch and a high fence called a palisade surrounding the fort. This was helpful because it kept enemies out. Second, they had a church in the center of the fort. It was probably in the center because religion was the middle of life. Third, there was an oven outside of the fort. The oven was outside because the roofs of the houses were made of flammable materials such as river grass, river reeds, and tree bark. Will this land be a good place to keep the colony?
- Was the initial settlement successful? Why or why not?
The initial English settlement was not successful. There were many problems with the colony. “It gave all the colonists salaries and did not allow them to own property,” (Hakim, pg. 28). The London Company wasn’t letting individuals own land. This was a problem because everyone had the same salary no matter how much work they did. This reminds me of The Giver because in Jonas’s community they were striving for equality. This is an example of equality being a problem because if everyone gets the same amount of money no matter what, people are not motivated to work hard and no progress will be made. Another problem was disease. The English people brought germs from Europe to America and many people died from them. Also the land itself ended up being bad for the colony. “The land was swampy, the drink water was bad; it was hot in summer and bone-chilling cold in winter. The mosquitoes drove the settlers crazy and carried malaria germs,” (Hakim, pg. 28). This shows that the colonists couldn’t have picked a worse spot to settle. It wasn’t possible to survive in a place where these things were taking place. People didn’t have the resources they needed to stay alive. Less than half of the people who came to the New World lived to see another December. How will this colony stay alive?
My Giver Essay
Below is an Essay I wrote about the book The Giver by Lois Lowry. I am proud of my grammar and punctuation. I am also proud of my thesis. I think I wrote this essay well because I was interested in my thesis and themes.
What is a Real Utopia?
Emma Diamond 10/26/16 Humanities 7A Giver Essay
How would you feel if you lived in a place where you aren’t allowed to make your own choices, everything is black and white, and most things are the same? This is what life is like for the people in The Giver by Lois Lowry. The protagonist, a 12 year old boy named Jonas, is different than everyone else in his community. In December, at the ceremony of 12, he is assigned the Receiver of Memories. This means he gets to learn all about the past from the holder of all the memories, the Giver. Jonas sees color, love, death, and pain. The rest of the society has never experienced any of these things, which makes them clueless and ignorant. Jonas will have to decide if he wants to risk everything to help his community or continue to be isolated. In Jonas’s society everyone sees in black and white. The Elders created it this way to keep the utopia. People being unable to see color reinforces sameness because it is hard for them to differentiate things. Eventually Jonas begins to see color and wants to help everyone else in his community see it too.
The lack of color in Jonas’s community accomplishes sameness, which keeps the utopia. Since people see everything in black and white, differentiating things becomes difficult and therefore less decisions need to be made. While Jonas is with the Giver he explains something important about color. “Because it was a memory from the time when the color was,” (Lowry, pg. 82) This shows that Jonas’s community doesn’t have color, but it did in the past. The Elders decided to make the society see black and white to prevent people from making their own choices, meaning nobody makes mistakes. For example if someone went shopping and there were ten different colored shirts they would choose what color or colors they wanted to buy. What if they made the wrong decision and later discovered they wanted a different color? This is why the Elders don’t think color is a good thing. Today mistakes are valuable because we learn from them. Therefore when someone makes a mistake they don’t do it again. Everyone seeing in black and white keeps things the same, but when Jonas sees color he wants difference.
Jonas starting to see color causes him to want to be allowed to make his own decisions. Since Jonas can now easily differentiate things, there are many more choices for him to make. While Jonas is with the Giver he has a very important question. “‘What if we could hold up things that were bright red, or bright yellow, and he could choose? Instead of the sameness,’” (Lowry, pg. 85). Because Jonas is seeing color, he wants to be able to make his own choices. This may cause him to want to rebel against the Elders and show everyone else in his community colors. If Jonas succeeded to do this the utopia would shatter because nobody in his society has experience making their own decisions and learning from their mistakes. Therefore, they would make horrible choices. Today, children are taught to make good decisions from a young age so they are prepared for bigger ones they may encounter when they grow up. This approach to choices is better than the one in Jonas’s society because, instead of completely shutting out the idea of people making decisions for themselves, we teach them how to do it wisely. Jonas is striving for difference and personal decision making to be allowed in his community.
Jonas’s society is trying to accomplish a perfect world by getting rid of color, and difference. Color being eliminated reinforces sameness, which makes it hard to differentiate many things. Not having difference is bad because everyone has the same ideas and no progress is made in the community. No progress being made means nobody is learning and life is meaningless. When Jonas begins to see new things he finds that the exclusion of color, difference, and decision making in the community creates a dystopia. Even if you didn’t have to experience anything bad, would you want to live in a world where there isn’t any color, you don’t get to make your own decisions, and almost everything is exactly the same? Maybe our reality is the real utopia and people living today shouldn’t be striving for something like Jonas’s community. Jonas ultimately starts to understand the importance of all the things being eliminated from his society and makes a big effort to help others understand them too.
Poem 3
Spring
Leaves are growing back
It is time for warm weather
It is time for shorts
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This is a Haiku poem. It is a syllable count. The first line has to be five syllables, the second line has to be seven syllables and the third line has to be five syllables. I use syllable count in this poem and line breaks. I like this poem because it explains how I feel about spring.
Poem 2
The Show
It’s our turn to go,
I’m nervous but I know
We can put on a great show
Will I fly above the sky
Or will I crash and cry?
I don’t know
But what I do know
Is that we can put on a great show
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Since I do dance and I have to preform, I wanted to explain how I feel before I go on stage. My poem has rhyme and beat. I like this poem because it explains how I feel before I go on stage and that my dance friends and I are confident even though we are nervous.
Poem 1
Ice cream
Ice cream
Creamy, Sweet
Licking, Melting, Dripping
Between my fingers
Yum!
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When I wrote this poem, it was starting to get warmer out. That made me think of ice cream because I eat a lot of ice cream when it is warm out. This is a Cinquain poem. This is the layout for a Cinquain poem:
Line1: 1 noun
Line2: 2 adjectives
Line 3: 3 -ing words
Line 4: 1 phrase
Line 5: Another word for the noun
I used line breaks in this poem. i also kind of used imagery. I don’t love this poem because it is about a simple subject that isn’t very meaningful. It is also very straight forward. I could make it better by making it less straight forward and more meaningful. Maybe I could connect it to summer and how I eat ice cream when it’s hot outside.
Shabanu Newscast!
JINDWADDA, 60
Jindwadda Ali Abbasi died yesterday. He died in peace. He died because of a sandstorm in Pakistan, and he died a few days later, because of the effect. We can’t be one hundred percent certain, but Jindwadda was very injured during the sandstorm. It’s a miracle that he even survived. He was found outside, and conscious but asked specifically to be buried in Derawar, but unfortunately, his request couldn’t be fulfilled. Jindwadda died in the night about 10 days after the sandstorm. “I want to die at Derawar” his family remember him saying.
Grandpa fought in the war between Pakistan and Afghanistan. He fought hard for his country, and we will take today to appreciate his hard work in the army, and be sure that his death has been noticed.
INFANT, 0
Auntie’s baby died in the womb from technical issues. He was suffocated by the umbilical cord. “It was another boy,” Her sister says after the death. The midwife who tried to help is Shahzada’s sister, who is a family friend of the Abbasi’s. Shahzada used herbs and powders to help, but unfortunately it was too late to save the baby. According to witnesses, the state of the mother was frightening, for the color in her eyes was not visible. After the death of the baby, Auntie was said to have slept peacefully in a green tunic. The baby was buried, and the birth was never spoken of again. According to family, the mother’s pregnancy was unknown to everyone except possibly the father. Auntie did in fact show signs of pregnancy, such as tiredness, weakness and gaining weight. Shabanu did have suspicions about the pregnancy, but thought it might be rude to mention it.
The mother herself is the spouse of a man who works in a government office and makes a very good salary, and sends her gifts. Her husband, Mr. Abbasi, is away a lot, and most people would even say that she’s lonely, but it brings her to joy the few times that her husband does come home. Mr. Abbasi is the brother of Dalil Abbasi, who is the spouse of Auntie’s sister. She is the mother of two lovely sons, ages three and five who are just starting to learn how to do work on the farm. When Auntie was at the age for marriage, she and her father went into search for a good husband. At first, they were unsuccessful, but after searching for a reasonable amount of time, she finally found her one and only husband. Shabanu, Auntie’s niece says, “Uncle comes several times a year, bringing Auntie gifts-quilts, shawls and brass pots. He brings us vegetables, wheat and lentils.”