Ashoken Thesis
Our class went to Ashoken, where we had a lot of fun and we did a lot of different activities. The best activity at Ashoken was blacksmithing because we learned something new, we did something that we can’t do at home, and we got to take something that we made home. But even thought this was so fun, we had to be careful not to burn ourselves. Everyone was so exited to tack your turn that it was hard to just sit on the bench where we had to wait. After we finished, we felt so energized and we couldn’t believe that we had actually made something that cool. On the other hand, with good comes bad…
The worst thing about Ashoken was the bathrooms because they smelled like rotten fish, they were too crowded, and the showers were freezing. Everyone had to shower and lots of people wanted to, but the showers were cold and kind of gross after everyone showering in them. The bathroom itself was horrible too; there was water on the floor and a lot of people slipped on it. One of the other problems was that there were a lot of people and not enough room. The sinks were crowded and there were long line for the toilets and showers. Let’s just say that it’s not fun in the bathrooms at Ashoken.
I really like how you described this really well. I really like how the bathrooms smell like rotton fish
This is awesome! I love how you used the format for thesis statements perfectly. Just check your spelling.